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[ravencallscrows]

Well, dear friends, i've been writing again. Didn't do anything on Melpomene's Daughter although there's still quite a bit of work to be done on it. Instead, i had a bit of verse kicking around in my skull which kept rattling around until i let it out.
More precisely, two poems. The first one should be pretty self-explanatory; the second is yet another attempt to capture something in verse about the Morrigan.
I'm breaking my tradition of having to like something the next day in order to share it- i'm not going to pass judgement on either of these two aside from noting that the second one isn't quite powerful enough for its subject, and may either get completely scrapped or become an early evolutionary form that gets reworked and revised until it's significantly stronger than it is now.
Without further ado, then, i present "Night" and "Phantom Queen":

Night

From within the void Between dusk and dawn A special energy flows Dark and brooding Primal, nocturnal Manifest in eyes of unfettered passion. Whether slowly, gently Or heeding a more frenetic Urgent call Rising through quickened breath As pleasure following pleasure Together in that place They commune in the moment with the Divine.

Phantom Queen

Primal, visceral, Majestic in her way- The fire of passions in Her blood. She is The awesome Queen in battle, The impassioned kiss At the moment of death, The wanton desire in a lover's eyes At the point of release. She is Terrible and wonderful, Manifest sovreignty The she-wolf guarding her young, The raven fluttering over fallen prey.

Comments

the second poem

[staxxy.livejournal.com]

many ideas in this poem are familiar to me.

should i be suprised?

and I like them too

[staxxy.livejournal.com]

cause I am a dork and hit the *enter* thingy before I actually said it.. I do like them. I look forward to seeing them when *you* are satisfied with them, since you don't sound like you are now.

Re: and I like them too

[wingedelf.livejournal.com]

Well, actually, i cheated. I re-wrote half of "Phantom Queen" on the fly while entering it. Then i went back and edited the HTML for both of them because of the annoying way the LJ client treats line feeds, which messes up nice clean table formatting- they're now a tangly mess, but the content is formatted properly for display through LJ.

Re: and I like them too

[staxxy.livejournal.com]

Heh. ok so *everyone* i have ever known does an edit when they type them up, so I don't consider that to be cheating.

[fenofeno.livejournal.com]

Night reminds me of how I feel sometimes when I think of getting out of here and going to a club. :)
hee